Blog #3; Prose Essay Reflection

            The Beet Queen by Louise Erdrich shows the impact on children in a very complex matter. Erdrich uses many different devices to portray this story in many lights to her readers.
              Throughout the whole piece she uses a narrator a way of keeping the whole passage in 3rd person. This enabled the writer to be able to use the feelings of both Karl and Mary throughout the whole story. Quotes such as "Then he yelled, "Run!" and 'They came by freight" are just some examples of her wording to within 3rd person.
                Selection of detail was a huge key to how the story was not just written but also perceived by the reader. Painting a picture of what was happening or what the character looks like was a huge part of this particular section of the piece, but it didn't just pertain to them it helped show as the environment changed they did as well. "His cheeks went pink..." in paragraph four gives off the idea or image that the lovely brought joy because the boy began to blush when he saw it. "They stumbled and scraped their palms and knees through the cinders" at the end of paragraph one shows how tried the two young children are. Rather then being able to walk off the train they both tumbled forward the image stays in your mind of how the cinders cut open there hands and feet and how the environment had already hit the two hard.
                Mary who was described as a very plain Jane kind of girl seemed to be a metaphor towards people who are unaffected by what happens around them. Her notice of the tree didn't come till after her brother hugged it and even after the dog was let loose she ran towards her originally planned destination. But her brother Karl was an example of people who respond and get side tracked well trying to fallow the right path. Even then he fell off the path. Louise Erdirch used many well formed devices such as detail, point of view, and imagery.

         My reflection;
I would grade myself at a 3. Throughout the whole essay I was very disorganized and was lacking a convincing element. My understanding of this passage wasn't  very clear which can be shown by the repetitive aspects of my writing. A lot of my examples seemed to have been repeated multiply times connecting to my 3 very under analysed and explained literary devices but also what the prompt was really asking. By the next Pros prompt I would like to be able to portray a better understanding between what the prompt is asking and how the passage connects to it. Also I would like to come up with a faster way to organize all of my thoughts so that I can use my 40 minute time limit to its fullest. I am hoping that as time goes by my scores will increase as my understanding of being able to write within a time crunch with a prompt progresses over time. Which I know will take a few tries but I have a timeline created of the next two to see a great increase.

      Reflection on Ashley;
Overall I would score Ashely a 5 for this particular prompt she was good at bring the prompt into every paragraph but was lacking in the description and analysis. Her points were there but only slightly supported even though her essay held a lot of textual references they didn't always come out very well explained to what the prompt was asking rather it showed what the image of the passage was. The essay had very few errors throughout which helps with the fluidity of the writing and how the reader perceives and understands what you are trying to say. If she just touches a little more on what the prompt is asking and describing in a more structured formatting her future pieces can turn into something much greater then it already is.