Blog #3; Prose Essay Reflection

            The Beet Queen by Louise Erdrich shows the impact on children in a very complex matter. Erdrich uses many different devices to portray this story in many lights to her readers.
              Throughout the whole piece she uses a narrator a way of keeping the whole passage in 3rd person. This enabled the writer to be able to use the feelings of both Karl and Mary throughout the whole story. Quotes such as "Then he yelled, "Run!" and 'They came by freight" are just some examples of her wording to within 3rd person.
                Selection of detail was a huge key to how the story was not just written but also perceived by the reader. Painting a picture of what was happening or what the character looks like was a huge part of this particular section of the piece, but it didn't just pertain to them it helped show as the environment changed they did as well. "His cheeks went pink..." in paragraph four gives off the idea or image that the lovely brought joy because the boy began to blush when he saw it. "They stumbled and scraped their palms and knees through the cinders" at the end of paragraph one shows how tried the two young children are. Rather then being able to walk off the train they both tumbled forward the image stays in your mind of how the cinders cut open there hands and feet and how the environment had already hit the two hard.
                Mary who was described as a very plain Jane kind of girl seemed to be a metaphor towards people who are unaffected by what happens around them. Her notice of the tree didn't come till after her brother hugged it and even after the dog was let loose she ran towards her originally planned destination. But her brother Karl was an example of people who respond and get side tracked well trying to fallow the right path. Even then he fell off the path. Louise Erdirch used many well formed devices such as detail, point of view, and imagery.

         My reflection;
I would grade myself at a 3. Throughout the whole essay I was very disorganized and was lacking a convincing element. My understanding of this passage wasn't  very clear which can be shown by the repetitive aspects of my writing. A lot of my examples seemed to have been repeated multiply times connecting to my 3 very under analysed and explained literary devices but also what the prompt was really asking. By the next Pros prompt I would like to be able to portray a better understanding between what the prompt is asking and how the passage connects to it. Also I would like to come up with a faster way to organize all of my thoughts so that I can use my 40 minute time limit to its fullest. I am hoping that as time goes by my scores will increase as my understanding of being able to write within a time crunch with a prompt progresses over time. Which I know will take a few tries but I have a timeline created of the next two to see a great increase.

      Reflection on Ashley;
Overall I would score Ashely a 5 for this particular prompt she was good at bring the prompt into every paragraph but was lacking in the description and analysis. Her points were there but only slightly supported even though her essay held a lot of textual references they didn't always come out very well explained to what the prompt was asking rather it showed what the image of the passage was. The essay had very few errors throughout which helps with the fluidity of the writing and how the reader perceives and understands what you are trying to say. If she just touches a little more on what the prompt is asking and describing in a more structured formatting her future pieces can turn into something much greater then it already is.
 

Blog #2; Poem Essay #1

Thesis; For That He Looked Not upon Her by George Gascoigne is a complex poem through and through but the biggest piece is the attitude it holds within the words. The story of life is shown through the actions of form, imagery and diction throughout the text of the poem.

Paragraph 1;   George Gascoigne uses the form of poetry based writing skills to create a well written complex poem for his audience.

• He uses the words I, me, my, you, and your throughout the poem
• Meaning he was portraying everything in first person making it more relatable to his audience
• For example “To see me hold my louring head so low” he uses me and my to show that he is the one doing the sulking

Paragraph 2;  Attitude can be comprehended in so many different ways but being able to image and picture what is exactly happening to that person is a huge part of writing a complex piece such as this one.

• He uses a mouse to show that even though he feels small in the world he is smarter and stronger now. (line five)
• The bait of a woman and her untrustworthy hurtful ways will never blind him again. (He has already been trapped once)
• “The scorched fly which once hath ‘scaped the flame…” gives off the image of a person being burned by someone they trusted.
• A concept that most people live with everyday making it a more open poem with the audience reading.
• Every person has had someone give them what people call a “death glare” which Gascoigne describes perfectly in this poem.
• The text states “your blazing eyes my bale have bred” making the image of eyes of someone that has hurt you in your mind every time you close yours making it miserable to even function.

Paragraph 3;  Word choice is a main component to any piece of literature including poems such as For That He Looked Not upon Her, but the biggest key to a complex poem would be diction.

• In line four the statement “No delight to range” is showing the mid century context of the writing, in today’s age those words would of been constructed in a different manner.
• Some lines even contained a pattern of words with the same beginning letter over and over again such as in lines eight and twelve.
• Words such as deceit, desire, scorched, and blazing divides people into groups that use that terminology in a way creating groups within his main audience.
• The groups will see the poem in different ways because some groups have a different definition for a word used within the text that has been created over time since the poem was written.

Conclusion;  Form, imagery, and diction are just 3 key ways that George Gascoigne made his piece For That He Looked Not upon Her into a complex attitude filled poem. Writing this form is never easy but he has been able to put a plethora of examples and notations from the text to support this type of poem.  

My reflection;

I would have received a 4 on my essay. My organization of the topic wasn’t to the best of it's potential even though it is only an outline. In certain parts throughout my essay I would forget that the key was showing the complexity that Gasoigne used throughout the poem. Some of my examples happened to be very irrelevant to what I was trying to say showing that my understanding of the poem wasn’t to the where it should've been. I didn’t ignore the author's use of devices which places me above a 3 but I didn't completely show the complexity in which the author wrote putting me below a 5.

Reflection on Ashley;

Ashley’s essay is a 5 because it’s very superficial in its descriptions and examples from the poem to support her description of Gasoigne’s use of complex attitude. The introduction is good she mentions that it's a static showing she has found that it is a one sided view, but is very vague on the description on to why he used this form within his complex attitude.   Her understanding of the poem may be off as shown in the lack of description in some parts of her essay on some very key components to the attitude of the poem as a whole.  Her description of diction, imagery, metaphor, and form have many examples throughout but the examples aren’t always explained in an organized way. Although this is a overall well written essay the fact that isn’t organized or developed as fully as it could've been, is the reason the score is a 5.

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Reflection on Riddi:

AP English responses are all new to most of us and making it poetry something most people have a terrible hard time understanding doesn't make it any easier but this score of 6 really gives off an idea of understanding. Riddhi had a great overall analysis of the poem and all of the pieces that formed the writer's complex attitude.  Her discussion about the two pieces were very good except when it came to describing it in a more thorough manner. Ideas were presented in a very organized way but was not a consistent command like a 7 would of been, it happened to be very close though. Her second paragraph is what really solidified the score of 6 for me because it showed how much she really understood form and how it pertained to this piece specifically.

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Revision: In “For That He Looked Not upon Her,” George Gascoigne shows the oppression of a relationship. Gascoigne’s depiction of relationships between a man and a women is set to show an opposition to the picture painted of true love to the world. Stated from the point of view of a Man who has been heartbroken by the one he loves, Gascoigne uses eye opening imagery, applicable diction, and adequate form to portray the tale of how love is not always what the world makes it out to be.  

George Gascoigne uses a sonnet more importantly a Shakespearean sonnet to tell his tale of love and hate towards the women. His poem is made into four different main divisions as well as holding a concluding couplet which states “So that I wink or else hold down my head, Because your blazing eyes my bale have bred.”  By also turning everything into first person he makes it much more relatable to his targeted audience. This makes it easier to draw the readers in making it so that because they are already paying attention he can make it far more complex without losing the meaning nor the readers as he continues on.  

Images have a way of opening the eyes metaphorically of people when really its opening them up to a new way of seeing a situation. For example in line 5 of the poem “The mouse which once hath broken out of trap Is seldom ‘ticed with the trustless bait,” is stated giving off the feeling that due to prior experiences he will never again be trapped by a women like a mouse is trapped by a mouse trap. The mouse isn’t used to show a weakness but rather the image of being small doesn’t mean you will take the treatment from another person. Later Gascoigne uses the line “The scorched fly which once hath ‘scaped the flame…” which portrays the uncomfortable image of being betrayed by the person you trusted. Showing the idea of a relationship being so toxic that the person will go out of their way just to hurt the other. In a way the betrayal is another way of oppressing a person to leave a relationship showed throughout this poem.

Diction is a main component to any piece of literature including poems such as For That He Looked Not upon Her, but the biggest key to a complex poem would be what the diction achieves. The mid century context is shown throughout the whole entire poem in lines such as “No delight to range” and “dazzled by desire.” Gascoigne even goes on to produce patterns within the structure of the lines, words with the same beginning letter over and over again for example in lines eight and twelve. Some words have different effects on different groups of people so his use of a wide variety of descriptive words such as deceit, blazing, and desire. Though each have a generalized definition some derelicts use them in different ways making it more complex in others minds.

Form, imagery, and diction are just 3 key ways that George Gascoigne made his piece For That He Looked Not upon Her into a complex attitude filled poem. Writing this form of a sonnet is never easy but he has been able to create a great work of art out of everything he did.

Reflection:

I think I would give myself at least 4 now after making my revisions on this poetry essay because I feel like even though I was able to still go into a much farther amount of depth it was still very superficial towards the way it could of went back to the prompt. I didn't bring the prompt in as much as I would of liked to. I hope by the next essay I will be able to find better connections between the prompt and bring it into my essay in a much more organized and well thought out essay. Looking over my not last year and reviewing certain terms may help me be able to bring in a better understand of how to describe and show how the poem is pertaining to certain parts of english and what the prompt is addressing.

Blog #2; Poetry Essay

Thesis; For That He Looked Not upon Her by George Gascoigne is a complex poem through and through but the biggest piece is the attitude it holds within the words. The story of life is shown through the actions of form, imagery and diction throughout the text of the poem.

Paragraph 1;   George Gascoigne uses the form of poetry based writing skills to create a well written complex poem for his audience.

• He uses the words I, me, my, you, and your throughout the poem
• Meaning he was portraying everything in first person making it more relatable to his audience
• For example “To see me hold my louring head so low” he uses me and my to show that he is the one doing the sulking

Paragraph 2;  Attitude can be comprehended in so many different ways but being able to image and picture what is exactly happening to that person is a huge part of writing a complex piece such as this one.

• He uses a mouse to show that even though he feels small in the world he is smarter and stronger now. (line five)
• The bait of a woman and her untrustworthy hurtful ways will never blind him again. (He has already been trapped once)
• “The scorched fly which once hath ‘scaped the flame…” gives off the image of a person being burned by someone they trusted.
• A concept that most people live with everyday making it a more open poem with the audience reading.
• Every person has had someone give them what people call a “death glare” which Gascoigne describes perfectly in this poem.
• The text states “your blazing eyes my bale have bred” making the image of eyes of someone that has hurt you in your mind every time you close yours making it miserable to even function.

Paragraph 3;  Word choice is a main component to any piece of literature including poems such as For That He Looked Not upon Her, but the biggest key to a complex poem would be diction.

• In line four the statement “No delight to range” is showing the mid century context of the writing, in today’s age those words would of been constructed in a different manner.
• Some lines even contained a pattern of words with the same beginning letter over and over again such as in lines eight and twelve.
• Words such as deceit, desire, scorched, and blazing divides people into groups that use that terminology in a way creating groups within his main audience.
• The groups will see the poem in different ways because some groups have a different definition for a word used within the text that has been created over time since the poem was written.

Conclusion;  Form, imagery, and diction are just 3 key ways that George Gascoigne made his 
piece For That He Looked Not upon Her into a complex attitude filled poem. Writing this form is never easy but he has been able to put a plethora of examples and notations from the text to 
support this type of poem.  

My reflection;

I would have received a 4 on my essay. My organization of the topic wasn’t to the best of it's potential even though it is only an outline. In certain parts throughout my essay I would forget that the key was showing the complexity that Gasoigne used throughout the poem. Some of my examples happened to be very irrelevant to what I was trying to say showing that my understanding of the poem wasn’t to the where it should've been. I didn’t ignore the author's use of devices which places me above a 3 but I didn't completely show the complexity in which the author wrote putting me below a 5.

Reflection on Ashley;

Ashley’s essay is a 5 because it’s very superficial in its descriptions and examples from the poem to support her description of Gasoigne’s use of complex attitude. The introduction is good she mentions that it's a static showing she has found that it is a one sided view, but is very vague on the description on to why he used this form within his complex attitude.   Her understanding of the poem may be off as shown in the lack of description in some parts of her essay on some very key components to the attitude of the poem as a whole.  Her description of diction, imagery, metaphor, and form have many examples throughout but the examples aren’t always explained in an organized way. Although this is a overall well written essay the fact that isn’t organized or developed as fully as it could've been, is the reason the score is a 5.

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Reflection on Riddi:

AP English responses are all new to most of us and making it poetry something most people have a terrible hard time understanding doesn't make it any easier but this score of 6 really gives off an idea of understanding. Riddhi had a great overall analysis of the poem and all of the pieces that formed the writer's complex attitude.  Her discussion about the two pieces were very good except when it came to describing it in a more thorough manner. Ideas were presented in a very organized way but was not a consistent command like a 7 would of been, it happened to be very close though. Her second paragraph is what really solidified the score of 6 for me because it showed how much she really understood form and how it pertained to this piece specifically.

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Blog #1;Multiply choice reflection

         Every person was handed a Scranton test and asked to answer questions 1 through 25 about two different passages. At first the test was a bit to handle being the first test of the year for most of the class not just myself. For me the most significant issue was that I hadn't taken AP Comp the year before. At first I did not feel very confident that I was answering any of the questions correctly or even understanding what I was truly reading. This might be why I didn't score as high as I wanted because of my lack of confidence across the board. This is similar to the ACT reading test in the way that it asks the same form of questions but in much more detail and uses stronger vocabulary. Having experienced and analyzed the questions I got wrong, I feel worried that I have forgotten a lot of things over the summer. Going back and reviewing terms and the different writing structures should be a good way to prepare and relearn for not just the rest of the semester but also more quizzes such as this one in the future.